It is a terrible thing to be fond of something but I'm exactly fond of Keşkek. I enjoy it so much. It seems as if it is nonsense, but it isn't. I have eaten so many times but it is different which eat in my hometown.
The best Keşkek I have ever eaten was in my hometown. While it is being prepared it takes long time but it is exactly worth it. You may not believe me now but if I say ingredients I'm sure you believe me. What does it include? It includes wheat, butter, salt, water and chicken. while you are preparing Keşkek, firstly you boil wheat with water by adding salt. When it becomes to the best flavour that is wanted, butter is added in it. After this step it is started to grind with staffs. Again it becomes to the best flavour that is wanted, chicken is added in it, but before you add it you should cut it into very small pieces. After it is mixed, Keşkek is ready for eating but of course with it's sauce. Its sauce is prepared with butter and ground red pepper. Now, you can eat whatever you want, but be careful not to eat your finger!
Unfortunately, I haven't eaten Keşkek like in my hometown for a long time, because Keşkek's taste that are prepared in different places out of my hometown are not as delicious as in my hometown. It is the only thing I want now, in the shortest time I want to go my hometown and eat Keşkek.
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my sibling, i liked your essay.your thesis statement and conclusion is fine but i think there would be more desciripting words.:)
ReplyDeleteThe hook can be better I think. And there must be more detail and descripting word because KEŞKEK deserves it. And by the way good conclusion
ReplyDeleteDear Ender,
ReplyDeleteI wish I could also taste this delicious keskek one day. You've described it very well but unfortunately you ignored some points while describing it. Such errors as sentence level writing, vocabulary choice and grammatical mistakes are abundant. Organisation is good and content is satisfactory. I'm sure this article can be improved. See my comments in the test below:
"It is a terrible thing to be fond of something but I'm exactly fond of Keşkek. I enjoy it so much. It seems as if it is nonsense, but it isn't. I have eaten so many times but it is different which ???eat in my hometown. ???(rewrite this sentence)
The best Keşkek I have ever eaten was in my hometown. While it is being prepared it takes (a) long time but it is exactly worth it. You may not believe me now but if I (talk about)say (the)ingredients (it has) I'm sure you (will)believe me. What does it include? It includes wheat, butter, salt, water and chicken. (W)while you are preparing Keşkek, firstly you boil wheat with water by adding salt. When it becomes to the best flavour that is wanted (required), butter is added in it. After this step (you) ???it is started to??? (beat) grind with ???staffs. Again it becomes to the best flavour that is wanted, chicken is added in it, but before you add it you should cut it into very small pieces. After it is mixed, Keşkek is ready (to eat)for eating but of course with (its)it's sauce. Its sauce is prepared with butter and ground red pepper. Now, you can eat (it) whatever you want, but be careful not to (bite)eat your finger!
Unfortunately, I haven't eaten Keşkek (anywher else)like in my hometown for a long time, ???because (the taste of)Keşkek's taste that are prepared in different places out of my hometown ???are not as delicious as in my hometown. It is the only thing I want now???, in the shortest time I want to go my hometown and eat Keşkek.
hi ender,
ReplyDeleteyour essay can be more effective ıf some sentences are rewriten.
it is different which eat in my hometown.-it is different from my hometown's.
it takes long time-it takes a long time
ı haven't eaten Keşkek like in my hometown- ı haven't eaten Keşkek like this.apart from these it is good.